The problem is that you failed to post the instructions with the essay question. Did the instructions say “Discuss both sides and give your opinion.”? If those are the instructions, where is your opinion. You are asked to do two tasks – 1. discuss both sides 2. give your opinion. You introduce both in your introduction. Please read my model essay mode carefully to learn how to do this.
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So, for the essay you have written, I personally would have gone for the one sided approach. Or you could have gone for a balanced approach saying “I think assessing progress is better for younger children but exam assessment is better for older children”. ( the explanation will be that older children need to get used to the pressure that exams give because it is part of their training for their future.).
Undoubtedly, university education, is accomplished successfully, promises wide chances of getting a white-collar job. Consequently, successful university graduates enjoy a prosperous and secure future with less risks of economic downfall and job instability.
To be at safe side, this is highly advisable to complete university education before starting a business venture in order to avoid utter disappointment if the business fails.
Hi Liz, I have written a response to this question without reading the model essay. Could you please tell me which band I am likely to secure? And any suggestions please?
Completion of higher education is considered as a vital step for one’s professional progression. Anyhow, getting skilled and experienced in various fields is also detrimental for professional grooming and economic independence. In my opinion, some practical skills must be attained by students during their educational journey but they must complete their university education first in order to get ensured economic stability later on and shouldn’t be relying wholly upon soft skills. These additional skills must be seen as a top up in their career building.
According to Robert Frost, the author of "Birches", enduring life's hardships can be made easier by finding a sane balance between one's imagination and reality.
Hi Liz! Thank you for all the good advice you share with us. Specially, these essay models, which are great study material for students like me preparing to take the exam.
After doing your advanced lessons, I came across the following essay question: “Some people feel crime rates are best lowered by increasing prison sentences”. Discuss this topic. What are some alternatives to raising prison sentences?
In this case, it is not clear to me whether I have to give my opinion or not. Also, I think I have to discuss both sides, even though they only introduce one, is that right? What is the correct approach to write an introduction and conclusion for this essay?
I’d be greatful if you can help me with these doubts.
Apart from that, some students opt for part time skill development and jobs to enhance their professional capability while studying. In my view, this is really a thoughtful and practical approach towards career building. At the end, they are in a better position than those who relied completely on soft skills or education.
The essay describes how Beijing has become so big, so full, and so expensive, that life has virtually become unsustainable. The result of Beijing’s transformation, according to the post, is that its residents, both locals and immigrants, just “pretend to live there”, leading “fake lives.”
Your tutorials are really good. I want to thank you creating such a nice and informative site for IELTS.
Liz, in many of the writing essay questions we see a statement saying “include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience” . But in most of the band8/band9 answers i never see real life example. kindly Explain what do we have to do when “relevant examples from knowledge ” have been asked for
I have a query regarding discussion essay. The question states, “Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations.” Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Discussion Essay statement:–
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
I am Jithin…. Preparing ielts right now, regularly I go through your post, it’s really beneficial…
I have a doubt one task 2
Many people believe that, formal pen and paper examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievements. What is your view of examination.