Instructions: This is an admissions essay for XXX University. The prompt is: "Tell us something about yourself - your present and future goals and how XXX University fits into these goals as a Christian university." It must be at least 600 words. You should incorporate that I am majoring in pharmacy, am Catholic, volunteered at XXX Hospital, and am taking college courses full time instead of finishing my senior year in high school.
I have already written a portion of the essay and I would like you to use the same ideas or possibly just expand and revise my essay--whatever makes it sound better. Here is the part I already wrote:
My current goals are, of course, to remain actively involved in the community. Recently, I volunteered at XXX Hospital, not just to help out, but to assure that I want a career in healthcare. And I do. After months of serious thinking, I decided that between becoming either a registered nurse or a pharmacist, that I would love to be a pharmacist. Since I love science and I love helping people, this is a career that is ideal for me. Currently, I am enrolled at XXX Community College with a full course load, instead of completing my senior year of high school because I am preparing to enter the pharmacy program. Although, right now I am focusing a little more on myself by preparing for college, reading, playing guitar, and spending time with my family, in the near future I plan to join a volunteer organization, or to rejoin the volunteer program at the hospital.